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Soul Mates - Email by eraserman Soul Mates - Email by eraserman
Soul Mates! Anyone enjoying these? Please? Thoughts?
Iffin anyone's got critique I'd love to hear it. Don't need a big dumb critique box you have to pay for to tell me how you feel!
i love you guys please come back to me

Meet Dwight, office Dullard. Just as Shirley from the previous strip, this guy originates from ~ShenTsumi's side of the development, way back when we did it. B-But I got characters! You'll see! Mark's my character. There's his glossy poster.

There's a story behind that poster that will be told someday.
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OH and ~FunkyAl wrote all those emails!
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ushi-cow Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I thought the emails were kinda funny/cute, but I didn't find the joke all that funny. I mean, I get it: skeleton talking about boners, but eh. For some reason it just reads awkwardly. Perhaps it's because it's hard to read Clark's expressions since he doesn't have a face? I get that he's unamused due to what he says in the second line, but... augh I don't know. It's hard to put my finger on it.
I'd like to see another page of this. Maybe then I could phrase it better and in a much more "critique" fashion. Sorry for the jumbled mess above.
Either way, I did find the text in the speech bubbles to be too big. With the already heavy lines on the characters, I think the bubbles should be smaller.
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eraserman Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I could do more with hooded peoples' expressions. Part of the joke I try to deliver comes from you having to fill that gap in your mind, but if that point is missed I have to work more on body language. Maybe it'll be easier to infer those gaps after more strips where these characters have dialogue.

Thanks for the advice on the bubbles and text! It's always been a mystery area no one's talked about. I kind of oversize things due to working big and thinking "no one will be able to read these if it's under this size."
Hope the next ones make you laff because otherwise my life is JUST A LIE
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Winterous Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
I like the setting, and it has potential, but this strip makes absolutely no fucking sense.
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eraserman Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Anything... specific you're confused about?

You kinda missed the idea of critique halfway through there.
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Winterous Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
I mean, is this strip supposed to ahve some kind of joke?
Is it part of an ongoing story (the previous comic only has a vague link in that it's the same place)?
It just seems completely irrelevant :S
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eraserman Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Dude, the skeleton guy's talking about the importance of boner techniques.

This is literally the same formula as Ben Saber. Gag-a-day, they're in the same setting, continuity is vague, the humor's where you find it.
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Winterous Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
I guess I just understand the joke then :S
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